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No Shadow Left |
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dracula68 Junior Member
since 2008-09-07
Posts 30Illinois |
No Shadow Left I walked in a dead land full of scars and missiles looking for sunlight some food, a car, a factory anything along the road and I found some flowers fighting and crowding in the crevices and soon began to name them and to see them not as One bustling angry clump but one and one and one I named one with 67 leaves a hyacinth another with a brown stem and wicked teeth a buttercup and still another a, big red vine gorged in blood I named “morning lily” and I called all of them “flower” smiling while I did so for that name was best and sweet and full of hope for life remaining and life yet to come I gave them water gave them light gave them buildings and rooms I straightened their branches brushed the dust from their leaves and then one strangled and ate the other And in this dead land, this reversed land the murdering vine grew a while and was happy far from justice as things once grew and the other seeing a chance to grow and to stretch did likewise to its brother eating and growing for a while I etched it on all their epitaphs they were what they were no matter their name |
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chopsticks Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888The US, |
Drac, I think you nailed humanity, not all but most. I like it, but who is “I” ? Who has all that power ? Is “I” an angel, a survivor or just unlucky ? |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Best part: quote: Perhaps a little less didacticism and a little more description. |
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