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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
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0 posted 2008-09-12 09:48 AM



A time to build


He looks at it, the residue, the left over.
He has to try. It is nature. The way he can
fly, the way he knows it is the season to find
love, he has to try. Try to build. His little nest.

The female one is too withdrawn. Still her eyes are
transfixed on the broken shells, half eaten eggs and
bits of their nest. The male bird is looking for
a safer place, if there is one ever. New nest.

A cruel yet neutral sun is watching them.
Snakes may return but the life must go on.

clever talks delay friendship!

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RC Langill
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since 2008-03-09
Posts 104

1 posted 2008-09-18 10:12 PM


quote:

A cruel yet neutral sun is watching them.
Snakes may return but the life must go on.



Your words reveal an unstinting harshness, but show how, whether from hope or desperation, we still press on.

I can't call this a nice write, but it is done well.

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