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jbouder
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Mike:

My point was to take 15 minutes to illustrate how I think the poem can work better.  I thought "pretenders" clears up the "guilt by association" problem in your offering.  I still think you've tried to cram too much into the sonnet form and it will be much improved by either expanding the poem or narrowing the sonnet's focus.  In my opinion, it still needs a good bit of work.

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51 posted 01-12-2008 08:50 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Your opinion is always welcome, Jim.
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Tori is saying, "No kidding!"  A message I wish everyone would listen to and keep the troops home.
 
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