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SecretTemptation
New Member
since 2007-11-23
Posts 8
US

0 posted 2007-11-29 03:47 PM


Not a true story, lol..
But tell me what you think..

_____________________________
Remember when we had it all?
Tell me this, do you recall?!
   When she was just a friend?
    We started something we couldnt possiblly comprehend.
    
      The kisses were friendly...
     Not realising the penalty --
    But now look at us --
   Our friendship = a sucess...
  Yet our feelings we supress...

Now look what we've begun,
These things she'll never know...
Its okay - just go with the flow...
  Were "just friends" so we say...
   Yet your girlfriend you betray...
    And my bestfriend ive led astray..
    
   The kisses are no longer friendly
  We now face the penelty.
Your girlfriend you'll no longer betray
And my best friend I will not lead astray...

I B l e e d W o r d s --
   I C r y R h y m e --
          <3

© Copyright 2007 Nickerss&lt;3 - All Rights Reserved
chopsticks
Senior Member
since 2007-10-02
Posts 888
The US,
1 posted 2007-12-05 08:59 AM


It is not even good fiction .

Once again way to many ellipsis and that equal sign was almost funny.

In my humble opinion, because I haven’t been sworn in yet by Brad, but I do have my right hand raised .

That takes care of all the zeros on this page.

TAXI,

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