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nevermore93
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since 2007-10-24
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0 posted 2007-11-03 12:37 PM


Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I keep listening for the sound of your voice
Its brilliant eloquence and comforting aura
Yet, all I hear is the wind mocking my plight

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I look for you in the shadows of the moonlit night
Its mystery haunts me, as does my memory of you
Yet, all I see is the flicker of a candle dwindling

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I touch the picture of you from our time together
The warmth of its touch, is as if I'm holding you
Yet, all I feel is the cold of the winter night

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I detect the fragrance of lilacs in the air
Its aroma fills me with thoughts about your beauty
Yet, all I smell is the burning ash of the fire

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I can taste the joy radiating all over the place
It reminds me of all the wondeful things we've done
Yet, all I can taste is the bitterness of my tongue

Now I admit that since I have lost touch with you
I can't continue on. I have lost myself forever
And now since my only request is to see you again
Senses fail me while I await for your arrival

© Copyright 2007 Elias L. - All Rights Reserved
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
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1 posted 2007-11-03 08:05 PM


you know, i could have sworn that i posted in this before. in fact i'm 99% sure i did. i thought it was the most amazing thing i'd ever read . . . and posted a reply after i read the first stanza and then i found out the the rest of them only got better . . . you know elias, maybe i am losing my mind. lol.

-Kate

ps don't sweat it when people don't answer to you poems, they all get read, but not all have posts. there are many of my own post that have no replies. it's okay, but i find a lot of people will be looking at them on a later date if they find out that you are a poet that they like, and then they will usually post something up and it will bring on a wave of new replies and interest. so my advice is don't worry about it, just go with the flow and the good things will be discovered.

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

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