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SmokeyMcDeezy New Member
since 2007-09-30
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high incestuous clouds claim the vast horizons do you fear it? say farwell to the pieces of the sky as they fade into oblivion only the strong survive a constant sway keeps time in your eyes the ocean seems quiet and the earth seems wise colonies of moss grow on top of stone for miles and miles the sweet stilness glows watch for the horseman he calls out your name he'll tempt you with reason and memorialize you with flames a shot in the dark a reason without rhyme the lotus will cry and shrink with time a continuous smoke screen running in our minds the plains are desolate cause the rivers run dry |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Hi. You don't have you're 'accepts constructive critiques' thingey on. Before we can talk about the poem, it would help if you turned that on. Also, if you could tell us a little bit about yourself. It doesn't have to be personal, just something about you and poetry would be fine. We don't want to offend anybody so before we say anything, we need to know if you posted in the right place. It helps us, believe me.  |
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