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Tomer
Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2007-07-15 12:42 PM



Sad like
A drip of wine,
Bending with its bloody drop,
Pirouetting with
His loosely fit tie.

A winter stage,
Curled above
His brown, laced boots,
Sat his black, cashmere scarf.

The signs of green
That watched each corner,
Lay it’s white eyes upon
His thick, raspy, skin.

His knuckles seamed together,
With freckles of hair
That spun its roots
Into the frosty air
That pasted the window stores.

Dicing his way
Through each corner,
He spotted the wooden bench
He grew ever so fond of.

Like a woven quilt,
Stitched with hands of silk,
He sat with his back
To the peoples stares,

As he stray
The air with blue hues,
His vision caught fire
Among the icy loom.


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Brad
Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2007-08-11 07:46 PM


This might be fun but I'd break it loose a bit. Instead of the snapshot approach try something along the lines of a camcorder.


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