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Acceptance Speech
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Acceptance Speech |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Acceptance Speech I’d like to thank my Mom and Dad, without Whom this brittle-boned ambiguous boy Would not be here at all. I’m sorry, Dad That your acceptance only comes in dreams. We had a lot in common, though you needed To be dead to see that we are both musicians, Improvisers, fools in the same damned way. We parted unresolved, a conversation Barely started. So thanks for touching base. In dreams you have more substance, and you Need a shave. Thanks for these conclusions. And Mom, what can I say? You always loved me anyway. Jim [This message has been edited by oceanvu2 (05-16-2007 06:51 PM).] |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Awesome! I loved the flow, there really are no bumps in this hurr poem, but that is only to my taste. Others may, and probably will, disagree. |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Paul, and thank you. I'm waiting for you to look at one of my poems and say "this is a piece of crap, and here's why!" When I re-read the more serious poems I've posted here, they seem as dry as dust. Many of the younger poets posting, including you, strive for and achieve an emotional effect as they work to find their individual voice. I don't know if I've been getting to that lately, and I hate falling on my face (though I have callouses on nose, chin, and forehead.) This is not "fun" for me. For "fun," I write silliness. My personal mantra is that "Poetry Moves People." If I fail there, the mere fact that I know what I am doing doesn't count for much. "May you find a stairway to the stars And Climb on every rung, And my you stay, forever young." -- Bob Dylan Best regards, Jim |
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poetninoit Junior Member
since 2007-06-10
Posts 20 |
Awesome speech. Same things i would have said if i had had the honours. Sorry about your father. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
This is moving and tough and I really like it. Its hard to put my finger on it why I like exactly. I just do. This is probaly my favorite out of the ones I have seen by you. This does has emotion in it |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
poetinoit: Thank you! rhia: Thank you for seeing some emotion in this. This is one of the biggest challenges I think I face, letting things out. Glad to know I get it right now and then. Best, Jim |
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