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Critical Analysis #2

What lies beneath

rockbabe
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 105

0 posted 2007-05-03 03:30 AM

The day he walked in,
Tall and rugged
From a place unknown

Overwhelmed with emotion,
She felt her heart beat

No words were exchanged
But only a dialogue led by enthralled eyes

Captured by his web

Promises made
Walls broken down…………

Secretly,

A mind filled with Deceit.

oceanvu2
Senior Member

since 2007-02-24

Posts 1066
Santa Monica, California, USA

1 posted 2007-05-09 08:16 PM

Hi Rockbabe: I've noticed that no one else has picked up on this poem, possibly because it presents enormous difficulties for reasonable critique. I'd just let this one go and move along.

The earnestness and honesty is clear.

Best, Jim

Jenna
Member

since 2007-03-20

Posts 180

2 posted 2007-05-15 09:59 AM

I like it, it has a dangerous feel to it.Very captivating.

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