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Essorant
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0 posted 2007-02-27 02:18 PM


To be free
from one thing,
is to be bound
to another.



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UseTheIllusion
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1 posted 2007-02-27 03:20 PM


Not exactly what I would call a poem, but it rings true nonetheless.  
Essorant
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2 posted 2007-02-27 03:56 PM


Thanks.
Indeed it is a wordsaying, not a poem.
But I think the art of wise wordsayings is a close friend to Poesy.

UseTheIllusion
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3 posted 2007-02-27 04:01 PM


It just occured to me that I jumped the gun just a little bit by assuming that everything in this forum is poetry.  My bad.  I realize now that your intent was not to write a poem.  And I still think that what you wrote is very true.    

Stupid me.     

Stephanos
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4 posted 2007-02-27 07:24 PM


Essorant,

I think the correct word for this is an "epigram", which can be poetic.  Also, if length were a requirement for poetry then haiku would be ruled out.


Stephen.

Ron
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5 posted 2007-02-27 08:13 PM


Of course it's a poem.

LOL. It's called free verse, Essorant.

viking_metal
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6 posted 2007-02-27 10:24 PM


How could one possibly critique this?

It is truth, but I don't understand why it was posted here in the critical analysis. What could any of us tell possibly you to fix?

I like it however, something that I'd expect to see on a notebook cover, and then I would desire to talk to the owner of said notebook.

-Paul

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7 posted 2007-02-27 10:40 PM


smile

It's been awhile since I have been here, and I am smiling too.

Of course it is a poem.

And this one, oh how I know the truth of it.

I am the Queen of Substitution.

Ess? yer alright!

Ron
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8 posted 2007-02-27 10:52 PM


quote:
It is truth, but I don't understand why it was posted here in the critical analysis. What could any of us tell possibly you to fix?

That's easy, too.

Show, don't tell.

Essorant
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9 posted 2007-02-28 08:00 PM


Thanks all.

Please don't mind if I still just call it a saying.  

If it were meant to be a fullfledged poem, however, I would have to argue about the idea of "show, don't tell".  When I went to kindergarten I think I learnt a little better to show and tell.    


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