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Lonley and Alone

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pen&paper
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since 06-06-2006
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0 posted 09-05-2006 08:31 PM       View Profile for pen&paper   Email pen&paper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for pen&paper


Possibilities lie ahead
Happiness accompanied by dread
What I値l do and who I値l be
Where I値l go and who I値l see
Some tell me-
I知 better than the rest
That there痴 no need for this distress
But I strongly disagree
For you see
It痴 only me
No one else
On this road
I walk
By myself
Without love
Lonely
And
Alone
© Copyright 2006 Cierra L. Robbeloth - All Rights Reserved
Shaddow1
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since 09-04-2006
Posts 41
Kingman Az, USA


1 posted 09-11-2006 12:29 AM       View Profile for Shaddow1   Email Shaddow1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shaddow1

Very good flow and vividness I could really get into this poem. But hey,some times I have found it is better to walk that road alone. Not all the time but if you take a break and walk alone you find you get down it faster. Dont get me wrong you should pick up some traveling buddies on the way. As for being lonely and alone, A lot of people out there are. I know if it weren't for my son I would feel even worse then you might. But keep your chin up. Because there is ALWAYS a light at the end of the tunnel... however long it may be.
I like your work and I am glad you like mine. Keep up the good work.

Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller

nina1522
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since 02-14-2009
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2 posted 02-17-2009 08:34 PM       View Profile for nina1522   Email nina1522   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nina1522

i just wanted you to know how  greatful i am for you telling me about this site. so THANK YOU cierra
turtle
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since 01-23-2009
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Harbor


3 posted 02-18-2009 11:05 AM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Hi, pen&paper,

I hear you're new around these parts (CA) and I'm happy to see ya.

This is a lovely poem p&p and I can see right into your sweet heart.

I would like to critique your poem by answering it in a poem from me to you.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Voices

Insight becomes the chorus of
Trials long traversed  upon this trail.
Though many I'll not rise above,
I've often learned from my travail.
What, therefore, does its purpose serve,
This knowing voice that comes of yore?
These words that dance on quill and curve,
In rhythms past, from yonder shore.

These voices of reflected light,
In dusty glows of cheval glass,
Lift fancy dreams to fluttered heights
And brings me back to fleeting past.
A specter drifts on mists of time
To echo lulling wisps of rhyme
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

......Now. Go read a book!
pen&paper
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4 posted 03-04-2009 08:00 PM       View Profile for pen&paper   Email pen&paper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen&paper

Turtle, that was amazing...so vivid.
I loved the last line...you paint such beautiful pictures with your words.

You're welcome, Nina.
turtle
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since 01-23-2009
Posts 491
Harbor


5 posted 03-04-2009 09:13 PM       View Profile for turtle   Email turtle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for turtle

Hi pen,

You're back?

How ya doing up in "teen"?

Is moonbeam helping you out?

stacylynn418
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since 03-06-2009
Posts 40
new york


6 posted 03-07-2009 04:13 PM       View Profile for stacylynn418   Email stacylynn418   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stacylynn418

I really like how nicely this poem flows, and you did a really nice job of making the mood of the poem clear.
pandabear
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since 03-08-2009
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7 posted 03-11-2009 12:36 PM       View Profile for pandabear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandabear

I like this poem alot
I like how the words all worked together and how it makes a lot of sence
 
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