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pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2006-08-20 03:56 PM

You think you know me
But you don’t
You think I will
But I wont
You think my Dreams
Just aren’t Real
And my Happiness
Is something you can steal

You don’t understand me
But I don’t care
Someday somehow
I’ll make it there

And from the top
Down I’ll peak
To see the expression
On your face
And see you put in your place

And while I glance
You’ll see I got my chance
You’ll see what I am not
What I’m not is what you are
And you clearly are not a star
What you’re not is what I’ll be
Someday soon you will see
What I am is me

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artexeres
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 156
south africa

1 posted 2006-08-24 10:37 AM

To reach the dreams and to make real that which, others only dream about, to prove nothing but to yourself, to not be swayed by opinion, this is the mark of a superior person?

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2006-08-24 03:13 PM

p&p--I enjoyed this one. The meter and the rhyme are inconsistent,and that's a good thing in this one. It adds to the simplistic feel. But the last stanza degenerates to aabccddd, and I think it would be better if you mixed it up a little more. Also, just as a preference, I don't like every line capitalized, but I know there are other opinions about that.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

artexeres
Member

since 2006-08-01

Posts 156
south africa

3 posted 2006-08-24 03:22 PM

S\he who knows others, is wise, yet s\he who knows themselves, they are enlightened?

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

4 posted 2006-08-26 10:31 PM

artexeres, please speak english

im just an ordinary southern girl

not a philosopher

pencil&paper
Member

since 2006-09-09

Posts 76
asleep somewhere in my head

5 posted 2006-09-10 02:01 AM

hey "candles" here i really like this poem

Ps i remember it really well*grins cheekily* i wonder y

your bestest friend "candles"

Shaddow1
Junior Member

since 2006-09-04

Posts 41
Kingman Az, USA

6 posted 2006-09-11 01:03 AM

Very good I like this one. It shows you have a lot of confidence in your self and every one needs that :P
Kudos

Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller

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