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Wicced_Witch
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since 2000-02-06
Posts 110
Clarksville, TN, USA

0 posted 2006-07-05 12:25 PM


Images in slow-motion,
a revolving picture show.
I dream.
Memories will invade,
with flashes of the unreal.
I dream.
Hidden meanings in the mind?
Subconscious talking in code?
I dream.
Insight to another plane?
Reflections of how I feel?
I dream.
A view in Technicolor,
in a world of black, white, grays.
I dream.
Angels, demons, friends and foes,
Things not always what they seem.
I dream.
The wonders, awes, and questions,
of future, present and past.
I dream.
I live, I love, I aspire,
I fear, I hope, I dream.
I dream.

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Skippyrick
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since 2006-05-16
Posts 150
Rohnert Park
1 posted 2006-07-06 05:19 PM


hi:

I like this one.  One thougt though do you need all the I dreams?  I think the flow would be better if you took out a the least half of them.

Rick

Always Lisa
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 133

2 posted 2006-07-08 10:51 AM


Just a thought...


Images in slow-motion,
a revolving picture show.

I dream
Memories will invade
with flashes of the unreal.
Hidden meanings in the mind?
Subconscious talking in code?

I dream
Insight to another plane?
Reflections of how I feel?
A view in Technicolor,
in a world of black, white, grays.

I dream
Angels, demons, friends and foes,
Things not always what they seem.
The wonders, awes, and questions
of future, present and past.

I dream.
I live, I love, I aspire,
I fear, I hope, I dream.

I dream.

Lastly, the questioning in this seemed to get away from you. Interesting chant though

Lisa


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