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loveislove
Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 59
USA

0 posted 2006-06-25 12:27 PM



You hurt me
I'm lost
I someimes still cry
I still want to die
Feels like I'm dead
Each day killing me a little more inside
I slowly get better
then I'm reminded of you
of us
our past
the present
hopes of a future
But theres no hope
You hurt me
and now
I'm lost

"when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join them in a mutual weirdness and call it love-true love"

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lokiwolf
Junior Member
since 2006-06-27
Posts 31

1 posted 2006-06-27 11:51 PM


um i like it but there is alot of reapetiveness with die,dead, killng me right after each other.
asome though

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