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"Faded Ink"
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"Faded Ink" |
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Khatharsis Junior Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 42 |
Faded Ink Everything happens with just a blink of an eye staring at a picture in the frame, lost in freezing of time But im unexplainably able to reverse and rewind My emptiness it hides, my tears flow like rivers in tides With a jarred in my hand, pick up with intent to abuse it Splattered glass around my feet, what I’m feeling, is useless The faceless whisper knew the life I’ve been through A faint voice in my head is telling me “find the strife within you” Words from my pen say I’m close to finding lies in the truth Hearing, “you’re already dead feeling the wind beneath you” Moving through the obstacles as the inc soaks it through My thoughts and pain follow the movement my soul’s been through A curving sorrow tells a story looking out a broken window Everything inside me shattered and this life’s to hard to live for Feels like sitting on the porch as life’s swinging away Just being able to get by, just living on this minimum wage Turning scripture into a masterpiece wit imagery of words Sadly, the picture paints a disturbance no one knows what its worth All I feel is the tears of the sun, even when it steadily shines I can’t hide my fears in the rain when its never heavenly divine These words, there suddenly no longer in front of me I can’t face my own reflection because the truth is too ugly But everything has a beginning, fades and u cant escape Incarcerated in time, my pen writes the message as the inc begins to fade... |
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DavidTheLion Junior Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 36 |
man now thats what Im talking about! Great poem Khatharsis...I love the imagery, the use of your words, the timing and cadence...and the overall kinda epic/romantic feel to it. This is my favorite of the poem, although I probably could have highlighted the whole thing: "Splattered glass around my feet, what I’m feeling, is useless The faceless whisper knew the life I’ve been through" I really like "splattered glass around my feet", Im tempted to do something with that, like make a painting or something...anyways, great line. Faceless whisper knew the life I've been through...I love this imagery, its so quiet, so detached in a way, an unknown voice, like a repressed conscious or something, tragic... Anyways, a big fan of this one! Thanks for posting it. |
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Khatharsis Junior Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 42 |
thanks for the replay. I havent been on ina while and I havent been able to check the replies. I am very happy your a fan of this peice. I have many more so like them lol. Thank you for the comments! |
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