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Critical Analysis #2

another piece by me

Roberta Little
Junior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

0 posted 2006-04-10 03:53 PM

Falling from Grace by:Me

She was a lonely girl,
always by herself.
Her eyes never glanced
away from her notebook.
No one ever paid her any notice,
no one ever cared.
She was played the fool
and now wants revenge.

A little twist of a fairy tale
and she believes herself as
God,
The princess who had it all
but lived in her mind.
Now she stands as someone else,
guarding herself with a faux face.
Today is the day the princess
lost it all,
including her sanity.

She reached for the ray of hope
that was promised,
But the world stole it away
in a fit of laughter.
So the little princess
took the closest thing to hope;
And she changed once again,
but into an angel this time.

Her dreams only lasted so long;
for she remembered
that only devils exist.
So her wings and halo
were replaced
with horns and a tail.

Never again did she change-
only realize her mistakes.
But now it was too late,
the angel had fallen
from heaven...
For the very last time.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-05-09 10:19 PM

I loved the end to this.. and where the whole poem led up to.. the poem in itself wasn't my favorite but maybe becasue it just wasn't my style (the setup) but different people have differnet opinion.. I feel like this is more than prose than a poem. but great job.. kinda confused me there for a minute but after that all was well.. Keep it up..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Roberta Little
Junior Member

since 2001-12-18

Posts 42
beloit wi usa

2 posted 2006-05-10 02:42 PM

yea, most of my stuff ends up falling into the prose catagory, but i guess that's just because i don't do the whole rhyming thing. i'm glad you liked it though.

GOD's greatist gift is LOVE

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