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Serendipity_13
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since 2006-02-03
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0 posted 2006-02-03 09:11 PM


your body laid out, still, silent
your slim figure dressed in uniform
so formal, so inappropriatly replacing
your favorite faded jeans, torn from wear
and your American Eagle Hoodie.
your hand-toddled, carefree curls now trimmed and neat
looking even darker crowing your silver face.
baby fine eyelashes closed,
curtaining sharp blue eyes so cleverly dotted with wit
and lined with trust
your beautiful smile faded, misshapen
carelessly hiding the dimples you always bragged about.
the quiet sound of sorrow replaces
your playful laugh
often mistaken for charm
and your words
too often taken for granted.
an American flag draped behind you proudly shouts
"It was a fight to the death!"
mocking what you truly stood for.
leaning forward a final kiss is placed upon your lips
leaving behind the taste of memories, bittersweet.
with unspoken orders your casket is closed
your body ceremoniously marched to your resting place.
a soldier marching off to war
gunshots echo and with a final salute
your body is buried,
my heart right there beside you
a tear still upon your cheek
a single rose upon your grave.
Farewell Mike Farewell


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warmhrt
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since 1999-12-18
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1 posted 2006-02-07 12:14 PM


A touching tribute. I can't begin to imagine your pain, but you have presented some images of it well My best to you.

Regards,
Kris

"It is wisdom to know others;
It is enlightenment to know one's self" - Lao Tzu

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