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b.costen
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since 2003-11-02
Posts 107
ontario, CAN

0 posted 2005-04-22 12:01 PM


Reinforced, confidence
emerges with happiness.
She lets her guard down,
this song is yours.  You let
something else down.  A
bitter memory.  A bra strap.
Understanding.  Reinforced.
You’re happy, that’s all
that matters.  At least,
that’s what you’ve rehearsed.

Poetry is sexual.  I’ve got
to be in the mood, darlin’
It don’t come easy.
And you look better without
clothes on.  Fingers.  Redness.
It’s alright, I say.  You’re
pale.  God made you that way.
You’ve got a headstart, I say,
on that heavenly transformation.

© Copyright 2005 ben costen - All Rights Reserved
merlynh
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 411
deer park, wa
1 posted 2005-05-30 02:58 AM


Gee, this is the second one I’ve read.  I was thinking while reading this that the breaks in the lines could be different.  Yet after reading it through several time I got wind to the style of your form. It suits you well.   The reinforced, confidence is felt in your words.  Very nicely done.

Everyone has a dream don’t let anyone push their options on how yours ought to be; unless they are making money on theirs and offer to cut you in.  Writing is full of dreams and illusions and that is often its greatest reward.  Thanks for sharing.  After the fifth time reading this it only got better.

Jasternal
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since 2006-01-22
Posts 8

2 posted 2006-01-23 07:01 AM


i like the 2nd stanza of your poem,
but the 1st stanza there's a lot of unnecessary words and really i didn't get the thought.

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