First, quick read.
this is original in form and texture to me.. it's surreeal, yes, in some ways.
I think that I see some message peeking through (I do)
In fact, the savor of the poem makes good readings and stimulates my imagination, too.
I can't yet crit the poem; must let it distill in me for a while.
I can say this: odd poems with kindly intent grab me by the collar. This is one such poem.
Grit crunch good, prodigal boy.
So, is a good read. I shall return to this and -add crit- if I can find anything to complain or explain about.