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Licking Sap Off Branches

b.costen
Member

since 2003-11-02

Posts 107
ontario, CAN

0 posted 2004-10-30 11:20 PM

we touch things
we feel free
our only limitations
stem from interactions
upon which we can’t agree

yearn
sew and yearn for fingers that might feel
the sweat between my thighs
might make my legs toss and turn

cup my genitals
in your weathered palm
kiss the cute part of goodbye

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 2004-11-01 07:40 AM

This has potential. Though the best thing about it is the title. Drop the direct sexual references. We alread know that that is going to be there.

netsky
Member

since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

2 posted 2005-04-02 02:30 PM

*my thoughts are between asterisks*


we touch things
we feel free
our only limitations
stem from interactions
upon which we can’t agree
*a break up*


yearn
*many years later*



sew and yearn for fingers that might feel
the sweat between my thighs
*once again*



might make my legs toss and turn
*integral to that earthy, former reality*


cup my genitals
in your weathered palm
*yep, she blew it*



kiss the cute part of goodbye
*can't go back again. too bad*

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good poem. never have seen manual sex in the crotcheting of an old woman before.  So -that- is what they think?  Some must.

dusk to darkness.  is a dark poem. unique. the title integrates archly, too.  nothing lost on me.  peeyuch, though.  Sap. limbs. branches.  weathered palm.  palmy days all past, all dry. and that is that.

[This message has been edited by netsky (04-02-2005 08:05 PM).]

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