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Critical Analysis #2

A Secret's Rend

xkiss_me_hardx
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since 2003-07-08

Posts 13

0 posted 2004-09-20 06:30 PM

The beginning is a bit weak and it was hard to get it all to be cohesive but i think i was still able to acomplish what I wanted.

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Dear, hesitation,

I writhe in seconds of neutrality between laugh and eulogy.  formless, I lack definition, while the panic posses me.

Fate is but a concept by which all the gallows bow.
the procession or celebration, are in her unforgiving hands now.

would the prick, the test, the puncture wound, prove pointless in the end?  Can i hear what i wish to hear, or be evicted, my sins to amend.

oh the moment between inhale and exhale, to float or fail.  My sword keen as a razor, mocking my rusted mail.

from adrenaline,

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