Heltor Skeltor and the Negroes From the Farm

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Critical Analysis #2

Heltor Skeltor and the Negroes From the Farm

mrmojorisin5908
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since 2004-05-03

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0 posted 2004-09-15 02:55 AM

A black prism escapes dust with an escapade
Down on darkness the child of the field prays
Transcendental winds blow euphoria of the past
The roars of the lion succumb with infinite grace
Calling upon the meadow of Slavic exile
Mighty sewn tigers are in awe of the blackness
Plantations murmur melodies of repetition
And congeniality is referred to as the ghost of dawn
“Come and escape the acidic nature of beings”
The holy divinity lacks eternity as a whole
Black or white: amour kills the cruel nature of one
Dionysius was a farmer of great excellence
And Zion was a mountain top full of frigidness
Call upon a seed of narcotic humiliation
For one may be a cosmic being
But; forever last the blackness that perishes to exile

Andrew A.
"I am working to make myself a visionary: you won't possibly understand, and I don't know how to explain it to you. To arrive at the unknow

Blademasta
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 4

1 posted 2004-09-16 11:22 AM

Best aspect: continuity of your ideas eg. pastoral imagery + tiger/lion; the image of feral animals tied in very well with the subject matter.

The major downfall in terms of how the poem commumnicates with me is the lack of ceasural pauses - it creates an opposite effect in that the structural flow becomes less smooth. Also, the ommision of a rhythmic structure, or meter may not have been such a good idea - the murmured 'melodies of repetition' would definitely have been more effective if they had a more tangible aural quality to them.

Still, it is overall a very effective poem, giving a very colourful glimpse of a troubled time.

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