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j0n4th4n
Member

since 2003-03-11

Posts 94

0 posted 2004-04-22 03:26 PM

No sooner has she come
back from her being-away,
that she is again away from me,
and I have to steadily
mourn her absence in new days;

she only becomes for halves of hours!
She met with me, a window in time
embedded hurriedly between
duties of study; and
in this we floated together quietly
like dandelion seeds, colliding softly
in the vague ambiences we found
to be empillowed in for half-an-hour;
the breeze carried us through to
our parting-so-soon,
and this I think
caused her to ask, sweetly:
"Will you come with me to S-?"

The day was becoming my own again,
and I hated it.

[This message has been edited by j0n4th4n (04-23-2004 12:17 PM).]

Yejun
Junior Member

since 2007-11-21

Posts 49

1 posted 2007-11-25 06:58 PM

Hmmmm, not sure what to say.

favorite line:

quote:
like dandelion seeds, colliding softly

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