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Ryan
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since 1999-06-10
Posts 297
Kansas

0 posted 2004-03-19 12:50 PM


bernard shakey

you must remember that
in his younger days
they came to him, men,
every single one of them,
and said, "this was not the plan"
"of course you are right"
he responded, "but still...."

years later there was a funeral
that many believed was his,
and in fact he lay in the casket
for quite some time, grinning and
convincing everyone that he was
more dead than anyone else
who had died in recent time,
JFK, Jesus, and John Wayne excluded.

but soon the word came round that there
was orange drink (a particular favorite
of his that had helped him through
the hardest days) being served in back.

not much later, someone glimpsed
him near the exit and exclaimed
(not asked)
"you had us all
you had us all
and gave it up for that!"

"of course you are right"
he responded, "but still..."
and drank his orange drink
and left the room
without another word.

in heaven,
everything is fine

© Copyright 2004 Ryan Williams - All Rights Reserved
hush
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since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653
Ohio, USA
1 posted 2004-03-22 10:54 PM


This is sort of odd.

I'm too tired to do a very critical reading... but as is, I don't really get it. Was he hiding in someone else's coffin? Or did her fake his own death?

I think either I need to go to bed and read it later, or maybe you should expand it a bit for clarity's sake?

Hope I've helped.

Brad
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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
2 posted 2007-10-13 06:32 PM


Popping this one up -- just because it brought a smile to my face.
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