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chrissydome Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 73germany 
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when she came home from work with an egg on her knees she looked at the angel sitting in her chair and said: "i'm not gonna paint you, honey, i'm not gonna paint you!" and they sang jingle bells for christmas and had champagn for new year's and when a football game was on she left the house with her girls the first time she realized that something was wrong she pretended to be rocked to sleep she then dreamt of a once-written song that once had her eyes shinig bright and they sang silent night for christmas and had cheap wine for new year's and when a football game was on she went to bed hiding her tears when she came home from work with a carrot in her hair she looked at the zombie lying in her bed and said: "i don't wanna paint you, baby, i don't wanna paint you!" |
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Seth Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 74Arizona |
This poem really caught my eye. I like your style very much as well as your "descrip" From the heart, sad, I only hope it's not too personal. Wonderful write! ~Seth drink some good wine this new year....a cab would be nice. |
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wintertao Member
since 2003-11-17
Posts 366Okaloosa Island, FL |
very creative, I like it. Having said that the fact that there are numerous mis-spellings/typos in this and you never bothered to correct them makes me think you really aren't very serious about presenting this poem in its best light. |
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