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Critical Analysis #2
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hibby716
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since 2003-12-01
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watertown, NY USA

0 posted 2003-12-18 11:22 PM



I’ve seemed to forget this gift
Getting caught up in the remnants of what I was
I forget to teach myself why it exactly was I went adrift
Knowing not what to think I’ve felt in shadow and in vulgar pain
But not knowing has led me to more
So now free from what you are, I’ve kept myself all the same
My eyes speak not of lies, and my dreams show more than plan faces
I now know more than ever that what I do is what is right
For tomorrow comes sooner than yesterday and tonight fades without a fright
My gift, forgiveness for my past, regret is not something that goes away to fast
But tomorrow I know, I know that I can be happy with the light ahead
Guiding me is thoughts of pure delight; I can’t say how long it will last
Knowing this, tells me I must do it right
I’m not going to hurt myself anymore
Never more bringing all around me through that same door
So I say to you be my guiding light
Be that person who isn’t blind to their own sight
Tell me all the things I haven’t heard before
So I say lets think today like no other
Mark our own words and defy the other
The music of life has been cranked up loud
And I’ve found I don’t want to turn it down
It’s marked my life and made me smile
And it only gets better all the while
So I say in tune I’ll be with the music of my life
Seldom would one understand what it is that’s playing
So just come and take a stance, and see my glee
I’d have to say it’s where I want it to be
All that’s left is for this to be, a dance, a chance let us see



© Copyright 2003 Jason W. Hibbard - All Rights Reserved
wintertao
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL
1 posted 2003-12-24 05:03 PM


I think there are some good ideas here it just needs some more work...some editing.
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