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tecoyah
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0 posted 2003-11-23 12:01 PM


Crossed floor stampede of pain
Bloodied toe shoots my nerves
Damn toys left strewn like lovers clothes


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Ramjam
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1 posted 2003-11-23 12:40 PM


the scene was nice but im not sure wht lovers clths have to do wit toys?
Not A Poet
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2 posted 2003-11-23 01:27 PM


On the other hand, it seems perfectly clear to me. Nice simile, IMO. A little frivolity is always welcome here. Thanks.

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Ramjam
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3 posted 2003-11-23 01:33 PM


wuts a smilie?
tecoyah
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4 posted 2003-11-23 11:12 PM


Ramjam....if you have kids, you will know exactly what I mean. The strewn clothes inevitably lead to the strewn toys.
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