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JustALonelyBuni
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since 2003-08-19
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CT, US

0 posted 2003-08-19 09:15 AM


Nice Eyes

Bent too close
I kissed the flame
Burnt myself
Full of pain

You shattered me
And made me cry
I told myself
Another lie

Forget the things
I thought we shared
What was nothing to you
Is what made me care

Those eyes you have
Are made of glass
They're used to fool
Those in your grasp

I let you in
And you broke my heart
I trusted you
From the start

The anger sets
My heart aflame
And you're the one
I have to blame


[This message has been edited by JustALonelyBuni (08-19-2003 11:16 AM).]

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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
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1 posted 2003-08-19 10:42 AM


Hi Lacey,

Welcome to the forum. An interesting poem but you will have to fix that one word with the asterisks in it though. You only have one day to do it so please get on it. While you're at it, you should check the guidelines for our forums to avoid such problems in the future.

Pete

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