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warmhrt
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since 1999-12-18
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0 posted 2003-08-18 01:20 PM


I long to see you,
standing,
with your arms open wide,
waiting for me to fill them,
and when I do,
then you close them
tightly around me,
hold me close,
and there is only us again,
no worldly complications,
forever more, only us again.


"It is wisdom to know others;
It is enlightenment to know one's self" - Lao Tzu

[This message has been edited by warmhrt (08-18-2003 08:18 PM).]

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raevynsbreath
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since 2003-06-06
Posts 64
Mi, USA
1 posted 2003-08-18 03:55 PM


it's a pretty little ditty.
i think maybe going into it more would make more from it.  
but short and sweet is also a good way as well.
and it worked here.
nice job.
_rae

warmhrt
Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563

2 posted 2003-08-18 08:23 PM


_rae,

Thank you for reading, and I very much appreciate your positive comments.

Kris

"It is wisdom to know others;
It is enlightenment to know one's self" - Lao Tzu

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