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Critical Analysis #2
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raevynsbreath
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since 2003-06-06
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Mi, USA

0 posted 2003-06-24 07:31 PM



you're nothing less than perfect
but you're everything to me
[how cliche]

it hurts to see
different

but sometimes i think
it's all in my head
[how unoriginal]

time will get over me
as i lay
heart smashed to the floor

my mind swirls
at more words

tacked down
fall down
lean down

feel something different
see something more than a starlit sky
it's coming down someday

the water's calm
the temperature high
as the electricity clicks through the wires
held by the giants of our age

[This message has been edited by raevynsbreath (06-24-2003 07:33 PM).]

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