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raevynsbreath
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since 2003-06-06
Posts 64
Mi, USA

0 posted 2003-06-17 12:05 PM



what's your favorite flower?
(i don't know.  why?)
oh come on.  you've got to have a favorite flower!
(not really.)
well just pick one.  so i know which to throw at your funeral.
(that's just a bit morb|d don't you think?)
no, not really.
(how do you figure?)
i see it this way, you're only morb|d if you don't believe in death.
(that doesn't make sense.)
well sure it does!  if you don't believe in death, but talk about it all the time like you know it all, you're not only morb|d, you're stupid as well.
(*chuckle* that's funny.  but i still don't really get it.)
you will... after you die.
(hypocrite.)

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kadafi09
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since 2003-06-17
Posts 143
California, United States
1 posted 2003-06-17 06:16 PM


i'm very intrigued by your views on death
this dialogue made me think

Ladybug
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since 2003-06-17
Posts 236
Massachusetts
2 posted 2003-06-17 07:09 PM


Hi Raevyn, very interesting poem.  I like the "dialogue" concept, it works well for the subject here.  Good job!

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
3 posted 2003-06-17 08:36 PM


Sorry Rae but this one just doesn't work for me at all. It must be my bad kharma or something. I really don't see any way to improve it. IMHO, of course

Pete

[This message has been edited by Not A Poet (06-17-2003 11:35 PM).]

topsyturveychick
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since 2003-01-19
Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus
4 posted 2003-06-18 01:08 AM


heya...the diagloge thing is really cool..but I'm not sure if I understand the full concept behind it???

I asked God how much he loved me...
He said this much...
And streched out his arms and Died.

**Sunshine**

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