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Little_One
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since 2003-03-16
Posts 34
montana

0 posted 2003-04-13 08:18 PM



Hey everyone, I first thought that I would explain a little about this letter and why I need your help. There is someone in my life who I realized that I like but the problem is that we are a little far in age difference. I am a little scared to ask him straight out what he wants to do so I thought about putting it into a letter. So please tell me what you think.

Dear the one I just met,

Not exactly the day I met you did I begin to like you. But not much longer in the future did I begin to fall for you. To anyone that I ever adored I would tell them how I felt, but you were somehow different. I intentionally did not want you to know not for the fact that I didnt think you liked me, but how you liked me. I understand that we are four years apart, and yes I am quite scared myself. I knew to win your heart I would have to be as mature as any sixteen or seventeen year old. So the day I realized this became the day that I could no longer be the fourteen year old child that I once was. That child I only sometimes and rarely miss. For I know that the more mature I can be, and the less childish I can act, the easier and better chance of you one day becoming mine. So I will willingly sacrifice my last, and most precious childhood years, if you are as well willing to give me some room to still grow. I understand how terrifing this must be for you, but trust me, I am more than glad to take this as slow as we both comfortably feel. And yes it could take time, but time allows that heart to breath. So now you know that I have feelings for you, now tell me what you are thinking. Do you want to persue a relationship? Do you need time? Do you not know? Just, I need to begin to try and comprehend what you just might be feeling. But just remember that friends could be the answer, and a life without you at least being a friend could mean no life at all. Or a life not worth living.

© Copyright 2003 Kristin - All Rights Reserved
Seth
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since 2003-04-13
Posts 74
Arizona
1 posted 2003-04-13 10:03 PM


I have only one problem with the letter.
If I may give a stranger advise...
In the letter you tell this young man that
you can no longer be the 14yr old that you are. This in my oppinion is a mistake. There is a world of difference between a fourteen year old and an eighteen year old, and there should be. You seem to be a young lady in search for love, quite possibly love you have been hard pressed to find at home. Dont sell yourself short by finding it in romantic relationshiips. you will only set yourself up for a huge fall and added disfunction in all your future relationships.
Never give up your childhood untill it is time to put off childish things. Please dont make this mistake. You might be thinking that this is none of my business and that I dont know your situation but you have just shown me and others a letter discribing just that. Trust me, work on the relationships that are going to last for a lifetime. Work on making the relationship at home right, youll have plenty of time to meet guys later.
As far as not being the fourteen year old that you are, that is imposible! You will always be someone younger trying to act and think older, deep down inside you will always be your age, nothing more and certainly nothing less. We live in a world where we come of age way too soon...thats not my oppinion, its a fact. Embrace whats left of your youth. I have more regrett over this one thing than anything else, so please,
be a child, you can only be one once. I would take the talent you have and write dad and mom a letter instead. I dont know your situation, but I do know that if your honest with them, you might be surprised.
Sometimes parents can be dumb, so can all of us, so be as clear as possible. Just a thought. Love should come from youself, if not, you'll spend your whole life looking for it in the wrong places. Remember, the word love, is a verb.

Seth

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