navwin » Archives » Critical Analysis #2 » I've Cried
Critical Analysis #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic I've Cried Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
leighsa
Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 74
Oregon, United States Of America

0 posted 2003-03-16 08:40 PM


                   I've Cried
I've been down and out
With nowhere to go,
No place to run,
to let my troubles be.

I've been myself,
No one else, but me.

Theres been times when i wanted to cry,
and sometimes i did.

Some cries i held within, just to be strong
Now the self-control and strength is gone.

I'm too weak to carry on, There've been to many hurts,
For this fourteen years old to bare.

I've taken protective attitude, one that doesnt care.
My thoughts have shifted,
my mind has changed.

Sometimes i cry wondering ,
who's to Blame...

ME?
Ashgiel


© Copyright 2003 Leighsa Marie Costa - All Rights Reserved
WhiteRose
Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon
1 posted 2003-03-17 10:26 AM


Very nicely done. An emotional write that touches the heart.
Mistletoe Angel
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Empyrean
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon
2 posted 2003-03-17 02:22 PM

















(sad sigh) I think ever so often we tend to get too hard on ourselves and that is what results in these expressions of grief and regret, dearest friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now these times have passed! (big hugggsssssss( I am not a good critiquer as I believe all sincere poetry makes up the best poetry so I leave you with my vote, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton













"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Critical Analysis #2 » I've Cried

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary