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Yesterday Red Leaves

Red leaves dance across the air,
Softly caress my cheeks.
Brown leaves break free and retire
To the soil of the earth.

Brown leaves mix with red leaves paint
The blocks with patterns of Mosaic.
All leaves are floating
In the air in celebrating...the new wed.

Autumn touches people in various ways,
To me it reminds me of you.
In yonder autumn, we had our first dance.
In yonder autumn, we shared our goodbyes.

Red leaves were your lovely words,
Softly suduced my trust.
Brown leaves were your solitudes,
Build up a pile of withered hope.

Brown leaves mixed with red leaves
Gave us strains, that slowly pulled me away...
All leaves are falling
In beckoning, that it is all over.

©Feb 22, 2003
Eliza Simmons
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Yesterday Red Leaves

Red leaves dance across the air,
Softly caressing my cheeks.
Brown leaves break free; retire
To the softened soils of the earth.

Browns mix with reds
Painting blocks with patterns of Mosaic.
All leaves are delicately floating
In the air; celebrating...the newly wed.

Autumn touches people in various ways,
To me it reminds me of you.
In yonder autumn, we had our first dance.
In yonder autumn, we shared our goodbyes.

Red leaves were your lovely words,
Softly seducing my trust.
Brown leaves were your solitudes,
Building up a pile of withered hope.

Brown leaves mixed with red leaves
Gave us strains; slowly pulling me away...
All leaves are delicately falling
In beckoning, that it is all over.

©Feb 22, 2003
Eliza Simmons


~Every girl has a dream within.

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
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