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Critical Analysis #2
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GavinKidd
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since 2003-02-14
Posts 44
NH
0 posted 2003-02-16 11:54 AM

I have no idea where this is going, or what form it should take.  Just some randoms thoughts I jotted down at work that I can't seem to get my mind back onto.  Any insights?


Have you ever watched a raindrop?
Its suicide body caught,
hitting.
Sparks of droplets shimmer,
spreading.
Have you ever watched a season stop?
Winds of change even brought,
chasing.
Heat of summer now dimmer,
leaving.
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Gamree
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since 2003-01-29
Posts 10
1 posted 2003-02-19 02:30 PM

"suicide body":  bueno!
Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438
With my darkling
2 posted 2003-02-20 04:41 AM

I can't analyze this technicaly,but as a reader,it is good work,but the meaning seems scattered and is lost on me.
Jason
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