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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
The Errandghost The errandghost in livery of nobled high divinity wends spacious ways upon her pens and with a persant gazement kens the worldkind lands and citizens, and residents of bright heavens, in flight throughout the universe a messanger, a knight, and nurse. She plays the inner harp of things and tend its tunes and mends its strings; upon the sky will so please on a cloud formed as an airy throne and wake solace within a strain over the kingdom and the plain. She keeps a rare and layered shield with heart and sword fixed on its field that change and wars endured and made sharp in defense, stout for its trade that hangs at her back, prompt to wield protection until dangers yeild. And speaks a tongue without a word but in between all things is heard her errand in all ear she says though clenched lots stall, all will embrace. |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
thank you for your poem I enjoyed it you ave asked for feed back so here it is. Please understand that i claim not profound kn0wledge. I would have writtin it in verse ( ie split the poem into seperate parts) form I think that helps the reader to absorb a picture before moving to the next.Perhaps you did not wish this? That is you were seeking an accumulation of images. I am nver quite sure how far you can take couplets before the repetition becomes a burden.It is a matter of individual taste. the line ended in "on" jarred with me. I feel that someone will coment on the punctuation and grammer but that is beyond me. I liked it . Good luck Arthur |
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