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Critical Analysis #2

Love Sees More

Essorant
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since 2002-08-10

Posts 4769
Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada

0 posted 2002-12-27 01:48 PM

Love Sees More

This life as fleet as lightning's flash,
that peirces nature, leaving ash,
can't feel heaven, herself, anoint
if its bolt draws not, brighter point.

It cannot streak and thrash the dark
enough to make another spark,
Nor hence can move cloud-feilds whom hove,
without the crown and ken of love-

A crescive crest that urgeth, dare,
to strive utmost and be aware,
Heaven's wings tend everywhere
with plumage made of time and care.

Do love lave life or life leave me
to death a lone sanctuary,
forever when I cannot see,
love sees more, clairevoyantly.

[This message has been edited by Essorant (12-27-2002 01:48 PM).]

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

1 posted 2002-12-28 12:15 PM

liked it
but you have allowed me to be critical so here goes

to complex/demanding perhaps?
( given that the aim is to define and share a human experiance)
I cant spell for toffee but some of the spelling looks odd
sound signature falters
but please -i liked it
and it is nice to see someone trying to write poetry rather than yet more blank verse
arthur

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