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Epicrean
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since 2002-11-17
Posts 16


0 posted 2002-11-19 11:27 AM



If not for the saddness in your eyes
Or your weeping care woven heart's sigh
These endless sorrows should never subside
In these passings apart
We so long only for a kiss (from the heart)
Or simply still every single whisper missed
But in our soul's deepest part
There we may find each
Together in the poet's choatic peace
Languidly there we shall happily stray
Past saddness's tainted streams
Of another lost lover's hopeless whims
To never say "sweet good-bye"
Rooted deeper in us still
The vows of our love ever instilled
Through the coldest miles afar
And in bleakest dismay's shower fall
Ever together are true hearts, apart

Epicrean


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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
1 posted 2002-11-20 12:09 PM


sometimes its hard to find words to comment. you took me to a moment, with one line in particular,"Together in the poet's choatic peace,
Languidly there we shall happily stray,
Past saddness's tainted streams,"
And how perfect your ending:"Ever together are true hearts, apart."

lots of love, gemma xxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Epicrean
Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 16

2 posted 2002-11-22 10:41 AM


thank you so much, that is a great review of my poem.  I am so happy you liked it

EPiC

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