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For contest I need all the imput I can get!!(revision)

Guardurthoughts
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since 2001-10-16

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0 posted 2002-10-29 11:58 PM

I rewrote this for a contest Im entering its on courage please give me feedback! thanks!
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Hands of the unknown write as one in a race against life,
to beat all odds, to impact the hearts of the envious we do not know.
Written to steal the souls of those in anguish,
spoken to calm the hearts of the wistful. As we call out for the fearless, we scream for the perfect.
Quietly love whispers to the lost, and calms those basking in its brilliance
Waiting as we watch the change, as the song of the minstrel brings a sweet smile.
Bravery is in the words, power drips off its very promise.
Eyes all around etched in silver lining of courage watch as life brings strife of all sorts.
Everyday people press onward, everyday life passes us by,
Everyday a sonnet helps a man threw the backroads of despair.
Each moment is filled with courage unknown to the enemies, then boom it fills the world up.
Everyday A word, unlike any other may affect you like never before
....Be prepared.
….courage spreads.

~~~Gaurdurthoughts~~~

"the best and most beautiful things cannot be seen,or even touched. they must be felt with the heart"

[This message has been edited by Guardurthoughts (10-29-2002 11:59 PM).]

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