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han_tigger Member
since 2002-08-10
Posts 50Thundersley, Essex, Uk |
Contented. I while away the hours like the sun, Contented, happy, shining bright. Purring like a cat at night, Glowing like the moon. Sparkling like a rainbow, In the sparkling rain. I wish to be a star at night, to glow forever in my light. |
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Robtm1965 Member
since 2002-08-20
Posts 263 |
Hannah I’ve spent a while checking out many of the poems on your site as well as the two you recently posted here. I suppose they are all pleasant enough pieces of writing, but discerning readers of poetry will, to be brutally frank, find most of them of little interest and rather unmemorable. Clearly you can write, and you have a basic appreciation of rhythm and meter (even if you don’t know that consciously). It’s really up to you now to decide whether you want to put in the effort to take a step forward and learn to write poems that will really reach out and touch people and make them want to come back for more. I’d be happy to explain a little more as to why I think your poems are of little real value right now if you wish, and if you ask me to. In the meantime if you are seriously interested in improving your writing I would recommend that you purchase a copy of The Sounds of Poetry : A Brief Guide by Robert Pinsky, and then in a few weeks follow that by obtaining Mary Oliver’s : A Poetry Handbook. Rob |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
My apologies for any misinterpretation on my part. I did understand your speaker as being contented at night. But reading your poem once more, I find that monologue can be taking place during the day as well. Be it as it may, there is an implied contrast here between darkness and being like the lights of rainbows, stars, and the sun. The alternative is to be dark, in the shadows, with everything that being in darkness connotes. So in a sense, your poem comes across as an expression of the triumph of the human spirit over adversity. God bless! Luke 22:53 Every day I was with you in the temple courts, and you did not lay a hand on me. But this is your hourwhen darkness reigns." Matthew 5:16 In the same way, let your light shine before men, that they may see your good deeds and praise your Father in heaven. (Whole Chapter: Matthew 5 In context: Matthew 5:15-17) Luke 11:36 Therefore, if your whole body is full of light, and no part of it dark, it will be completely lighted, as when the light of a lamp shines on you." [This message has been edited by Radrook (08-28-2002 11:58 AM).] |
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han_tigger Member
since 2002-08-10
Posts 50Thundersley, Essex, Uk |
I would just like to say to Rob that i can find none of your poems posted and you have no contact address, so how do i get further information!!!!!!! |
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Robtm1965 Member
since 2002-08-20
Posts 263 |
Hannah The reason you can’t find any of my poems posted is that I haven’t posted any. As for further information: simply ask here in this forum and I shall do my best to deliver by means of a further response in the forum. Are you asking? Rob |
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