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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon 
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If the passion doesn't steer the flow take the reader where he should go then whether metered or just rhymned the verse is just a bunch of lines. WhiteRose In truth, what defines us is our poetry. |
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beccymelling Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 31Birmingham, England |
LOL. Very true! liked it. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
First the downside: I know what you are trying to say, but it still needs a little more. The upside, short and to the point. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is just a happy little thought. Never meant to be a poem really. I just thought I'd post it here since this is where we discuss poetry as opposed to writing it all the time. Just a fun little blurb. But thank you for the responses. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Actually, I rather liked it. Like you said, it was never meant to be great poetry but it gets the point across in a way we can all understand. Just because this is CA doesn't mean that everything in here needs to be "ground breaking", IMHO. A little light-hearted fun is always welcome. Thanks, Pete |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
First I would like to say that you are one beautiful woman! Wow! I fiddled around with the meter a bit and came up with this in an attempt to make the flow smoother within the pentameter parameters. If the passion does not steer the flow, then take the reader where he wants go. Whether metered or just simply rhymned, the poem will become a bunch of lines. Thanks for sharing lovely lady! God Bless1 |
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Gabriel Frost Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 216Between midnight thoughts |
Very true. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Thank you everyone. I'm so glad my little bit of fun was taken in the spirit in which is was given. :-) And thank you so much Radrook, you have managed to make me *blush* with your compliment. What a lovely way to start my day. You're a dear. |
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Trevor Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 700Canada |
No fun, we must not have fun!!!! This is serious, we must work, work, work!!!!  Okay, maybe I'm overtired or have let my guard down, but I enjoyed this poem as well. Very cute stuff....but something inside is begging me to give it a serious critique...ahhh, I'm a victim of my own self  Thanks for the read, Trevor |
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vellamike New Member
since 2002-08-17
Posts 7 |
Thats very good stuff! |
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