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Critical Analysis #2

Voices in the Night

R. Dean
Junior Member

since 2002-07-26

Posts 37
Illinois--USA

0 posted 2002-07-30 01:36 PM

They wake me sometimes.
Names, nonentities
come out of the corners like leftover pipe smoke,
jerking at my slumber,
scratching at the soft circles
I drew around my head.

      Spirits, pardon me;
      I am a dense dreamer!
      Transfer of consciousness slows down
      when aging dashes on.
      Inner sound and psychic sense
      don't mingle very well.

Yet they persist:
their whispers inarticulate, seductive,
for my mind, surreal—
breaking up my memories in fragments,
bringing recollection only in a  later dream,
then never with a reason why.

      And I may reason why,
      convoke these shades
      and cry to you
      that I, too, reach with hollow hands
      across the bridge of consciousness
      until I die,
      and travel on the edge of time.

I think that they are teaching me—
these voices.  Systematically
in silent, restless throbbing they prepare me,
their strength gaining as mine wanes.
I think they watch, like tower control
upon the homing planes.
I think they know
to what stupendous realm I go.

Kirk T Walker
Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 357
Liberty, MO

1 posted 2002-07-30 01:59 PM

A second poem on death? The indented stanzas seem to be addressing the "voices" while the unindented seem to be addressed to the reader. I thought this created a nice effect. Overall, an interesting take.

Disclaimer: The preceding statement is just my opinion.

R. Dean
Junior Member

since 2002-07-26

Posts 37
Illinois--USA

2 posted 2002-07-30 02:06 PM

yep, you got it....and never apologize for your opinion. That's what this board is for, right?

Yours in peace,

Dean

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