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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon 
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You project what I reflect that's how much our minds touch. You feel what's real what I hide inside. Now separate we don't exist. [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (07-24-2002 08:07 PM).] |
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BigBlueLu New Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 5 |
Disclaimer( I BigBlueLu know nothing and do not claim I know anything about anything. I write this only because this forum has been created to allow free thought. My thoughts are worth what you paid for them.) -->The first line sounds like an infinite loop to me. -->Why would you want to hide something? Do you really want the other person to feel what you have to hide? -->Overall i like the smiplicity, and you should not have a problem getting it out. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I am a woman with many secrets. The "loop" was meant to represent that. I don't know if that's typical or atypical I just know it's true with me. |
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The Napkin Writer Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 70 |
It sounds to me like the meeting of soul mates? One who not only understands the reflection of life you give, but also, their projection of their life is so similar, they may even say what you’re thinking. I think it takes a soul mate to see and understand the things we hide inside. "Just my opinion, not cast in stone" |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
This is critical analysis and misspelling is acceptable? That explains a lot. Casey If all you want is emotion, go down to walmart, buy yourself a diary and hide it in a drawer where no one can see... |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Ms. Rose: I get what you're saying (you've met or known someone who seems to be a perfect fit, who seems to be able to get to know you even when you're being guarded). But what I'm missing is a clear picture. I understand, but I don't see. That is why the poem didn't grab me as it could have. Your poem evokes pictures in your mind that are meaningful to you. For me, it describes two people I don't know who have some sort of intimate connection, and after reading the poem, I don't know the two people any better. Try introducing some images that other people can identify with and weaving into the structure of your poem. Merely an opinion. Thanks for the read. Jim |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Thank you all for your critique. This poem was written for me and that one other person. It described perfectly the relatinship we had. Just thought I'd share it here. and *oops* on the misspelled word. Not sure what it explains, but I don't mind being in the dark sometimes, it's much more fun :-) [This message has been edited by WhiteRose (07-24-2002 08:20 PM).] |
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