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mistyrose
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 75
state of anxiety

0 posted 2001-05-05 03:29 PM

....he tosses
hot white coals
for her to step on
as she wakes from
her only peace

she doesnt flinch
nor dare
she cry its
indication would only
bring him joy

but she dare not
feel it
until times after
when others
live loving
while her feet
remain burning

she dare not utter a
single grievance
nor grimace
on her face
or allow a moment
for pain
to disarm her

she gingerly
steps forward
feet battered beaten
and worn along with
her soul mind and
heart

she will travel
alone.....

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

1 posted 2001-05-05 03:32 PM

the way is painful underfoot,
and she travels alone, that's no good.
but the poem here is nice indeed,
thanks for sharing it with me.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-05-05 04:09 PM

I don't know who he is but I hope she leaves him far bihind. Joyce

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2001-05-05 04:17 PM

This is a very powerful image! I felt this one.

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

4 posted 2001-05-05 08:15 PM

Love is sometimes painful! Good poem.

Betty Lou Hebert

FiGHT_aGaiNST_FoRM
Junior Member

since 2001-05-01

Posts 13
aMeRiCa

5 posted 2001-05-06 09:20 AM

New steps in the sand may look similar to the old, but this does not mean the foot is the same...Some people stay the way they are, others can change...the ones that do are better off...this, too, is true with the words we write...sometimes we are no longer complacent with what we write, so our hearts move forward. This, too, is best. Always write with your eyes closed and your heart wide open.

Your friend,
FaF

[This message has been edited by FiGHT_aGaiNST_FoRM (edited 05-06-2001).]

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2001-05-06 11:04 PM

MistyRose~
Wow !
This is vividly realistic ...
I felt the burn and the hurt !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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