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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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Upon the heights, the sun still shines, But down here though, there are no signs Of daylight left. The shadows creep From tree to tree. The small frogs peep Their high-pitched song along the shore And night invades the woods once more. Out in the yard, I keep my eyes Trained on those hills where last light lies And marvel at the varied hues, The sinking sun their slopes embrues. I watch until the dark conspires To hide away those lofty spires And feel my way into a room, To light a lamp and see it bloom Into a glowing, amber core, That pushes night outside my door. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BettyLou~ This is just the loveliest piece~ I like what you do with your thoughts !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Intriging, I like it  Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
You find so much in nature. I wish I could see with your eyes. Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Marge: Thanks for taking time to read and comment. I'm glad you liked the poem. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Thank you Moon Dust. Joyce: I appreciate your comments. Nature is endlessly fascinating to me. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I think you are almost right up there with Robert Frost.. a great poem. |
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mistyrose Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 75state of anxiety |
i felt like i was there with you thanks for sharing that time with me mistyrose~ |
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twinsgd Member
since 2000-02-13
Posts 416Ontario,Canada |
A beautiful piece Trillium Perhaps now you might....... See a beam of light from the Harvest Moon Cast a golden glow there inside your room. Jack |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Trillium, I loved this, you write so vividly The flow was great as well, but I felt there was a little bump in the 8th line.... "Trained on those hills where last light lies" maybe leave out the "those" and possibly a comma after hills. Just an opinion Maree |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dear Songbird: You are too flattering! Robert Frost is one of my favorite poets. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Misty Rose and Jack: Thank you both for reading and taking time to comment. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Dark Angel: Thanks for you comments and I do appreciate your reading the poem. I wrote it with an 8 count meter. If I leave "those" out of the 8th line, it destroys the meter and I don't feel it serves the poem well to do so. However, I am always open to suggestions and enjoy other opinions, so thanks for voicing yours. Betty Lou Hebert |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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