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Trillium 
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA 
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The threshing crew had eaten. The dishes put away. My aunt and mother's chores were done Until another day. The moon outside was brilliant. It beckoned them out there. My uncle hollered at them: "Be careful of the bear." "What bear is that?" my aunt replied. She gave my mom a wink. "The bear I saw last evening. He's after pigs I think. His footprints are gigantic And he trampled down some grain, So keep your eyes wide open, If you wander down the lane." The women closed the door and laughed. They thought he was a tease. The smell of smoke and wheat was borne Upon the autumn breeze. The walk was long and lovely And as they turned around, They heard a rustle in the brush. A sort of huffing sound. My mother whispered to my aunt "It's just one of the boys. They think that they will scare us, By making "bearish" noise." They talked a mile a minute And laughed aloud to show They weren't the slightest frightened. The noise continued though. It followed them into the yard, But nothing could they see. They were convinced it was the guys, Up to tomfoolery! They grinned as they went in the door, But those grins faded when They saw a card game going on And counted all the men! Previously published in Grandmother Earth News Betty Lou Hebert [This message has been edited by Trillium (edited 03-30-2001).] |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
 You tell a good story here, and in excellent form, too. It made me think of a few encounters with critters we've had over the years. Did they ever admit it to the men?To love another person is to see the face of God. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Very good story, Betty Lou. There are some of these family tales in all our trees, I think. Thanks. "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Delightful poem Betty! I enjoyed this! Congratulations on having it published too! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I love this Betty. Having four older brothers, I was never quite sure whether what they were telling me was true or a big tease. So I know how these two felt. Joyce |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
QQPs, very scary after the fact. Nicely done story that I really enjoy. This would break into stanzes quite nicely, which would control the flow of the read, building the suspense. Have you consider that? -wordancer |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Great story. I enjoy stories in rhyme. Melton |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
What a terrific yarn you weave, i love it...had me on tender hooks... A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
kcsgrandma: Yes the women did admit to the men that they thought one of them was following them. The next morning, they found the bear tracks. Thanks for commenting. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Thank you one and all for your nice comments. Glad you all enjoyed the poem. Betty Lou Hebert |
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