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Solstice Son Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 469 |
(( because its so often..just one word..that fills us with desire..and contentment...amazement...and passion..I had to write this..in response..Sol  ))Kiss me... just for a while do something with those lips of yours even though I love your smile. Kiss me... make my heart feel light warm me with the taste of love while the Moon sails through the night Kiss me... over and over now don't stop till break of day till I can no longer breathe for a kiss is best that way Kiss me... do it now just put your lips on mine kiss me now, there's nothing else from this point on...we've only Time.... Kiss me.... ~Which way did They go? How many of Them were there? I MUST find Them!! I AM THEIR LEADER!!~ Author Unknown..well at least to me..:) |
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kismetkelsey Junior Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 32Canada |
An absolutely lovely poem! Enjoyed this kiss of a read!~Smiles~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Not bad at all. It had a nice mood to it. Although I think you could have rhymed "mine" with something other than "time." That bothered me a tad, because it really isn't a rhyme.  Still, a nice job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Mmmmm.. this is such a delicious poem.. perfectly written.. yes, I agree, Mine does not rhyme with Time.. but I don't think it really has to perfectly rhyme, because the meaning fits so brilliantly.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Solstice Son Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 469 |
Thank you for all the kind words.....and for those of you who get hung up on the mine/time issue *G* Kiss me... do it now kiss me you silent Mime kiss me now there's nothing else from this point ....we've only Time *G* sorry...but there is a method to my madness....*G* now aren't we all happier with the first version?? *G* Sol |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Yep the first version Nice read.Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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