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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
This was written for the pure fun of it... partially with kids in mind (of any age *g*)... a bit of a tongue-twister - hope you enjoy it! ******************************** Raindrop Journey Tiny raindrops bouncing, elasticity in motion; joyous meld of bubbles in a puddle-soft implosion. Puddles burping ripples with their hungry edges sprawling, wanderlust of trickle to the surging river's calling. Restless arm of river waving high in wild emotion; torrents swirling corners to the appetite of ocean. Tidal pull of ocean gulps them all in eager kiss - river, puddle, raindrops - breathes a sigh of silver mist. Misty cloud of raindrops keeps the circle ever strong: form and purpose changing, but its essence never gone. [This message has been edited by laryalee (edited 02-24-2001).] |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I hope you weren't trying to apolize for writing this! It is wonderful! I am not a kid but will always be one at heart. Feed me some more poems like this! You certainly can find the an array of words to paint your poetry pictures just right! |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
What a marvelous blend of language and images, Lary! You definitely do not have to be a kid to appreciate this.  To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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jbaker Member
since 2001-02-16
Posts 74Australia |
This is really great....and explains raindrops so well. (Although we don't see quite enough of them here, where I live) Such beautiful words put together so well. JB |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
How beautifully you have penned the journey of a raindrop! A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
i thought this was exquisite!! i loved it it's so pretty!! esp. the 2nd par. i liked that best,very lovely!! swamp much madness is divinest sense~Emily Dickinson |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Puddles burping, oceans gulping, oh laryalee this is wonderful!!!!! Bonnie |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Don't know why, but this reminds my how I used to jump in puddles as a kid Enjoyed this ~FKA Maria Byrne~ |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
That brought back some memories...mostly playful ones.  **No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.** ~a_little_girl |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
You have described a delightful imagery I usually just take for granted. Thanks for the mental picture. Melton |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
So happy you all enjoyed this splash! Sorry to be so late in responding - I'm having schedule problems, sigh. Thank goodness for this Corner of the forum - I can't keep up with the pace of the main one Songbird - I felt like a kid, writing about 'puddles burping ripples' - but maybe (hopefully) we all keep a bit of the child in us.... Thanks! Marilyn, I'm glad you enjoyed it - it was fun to write! JB - I guess this is not the season for it in your part of the world...thanks for your comments! Ellie, I really appreciate your thought - thanks so much! Hey Swamp Faeryie - I bet you still love splashing in puddles! Thanks for your wing-touch! Moon Dust - Ah ha! I know that feeling! Girl - I'm glad, because it was written with playfulness - thanks for dropping in! Melton, thank you - I also wanted to indicate appreciation for this 'circle', and I'm pleased that it comes across. Wonderful encouragement - thank you, my friends.... Lary |
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