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Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
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Missouri

0 posted 2001-02-22 10:15 AM



I could say that Spring was a flutter
But I know that you've heard that before
Instead I'll just say I heard it knocking
A Red Headed Speckled Woodpecker
Came gliding past my window
Bolding perching within my view

Just as I started for the camera
He just flew away
Oh well I thought, I'll get his pic
Some other day

No, I thought..
As I slid in the film
Why not go outside
To see if he's still around

So with my camera in hand
I took a morning stroll
Without even a sweater
And sandals on my feet

I walked around looking
For the creature that had
Awakened my curiosity

Their was a chorus of
Birds on the wing
Flitting and fluttering
Singing songs most serene

The air had a scent of mint julep and pine
I found myself wandering
Insanely senseless down a red muddy road
After hearing the gentle knocking
On the wood of an old snarled Oak tree

I could see in the distance
Those red, black and white creatures way up
In its branches
Gathering their breakfast
So diligently

Beholding the beauty
Of their colors so supreme
With the eye of my camera
I took aim

God bless you my friends
God bless your tree
God give you a family
And I thank him for thee.



© Copyright 2001 Marcia Estep - All Rights Reserved
pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
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ocala, fl, usa
1 posted 2001-02-22 11:52 AM


really lovely Songbird..we have the little darlings here in my neighborhood too.. should be showing up anytime now..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
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Alberta, Canada
2 posted 2001-02-22 01:40 PM


Songbird, you take us by the hand for this fresh morning walk - with a lilting sense of appreciation and joy - so nice to share it with you!
Lary

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
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King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2001-02-22 05:32 PM


this is delightful my friend, I so appreciate you love of nature...Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24
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Presque Isle, ME
4 posted 2001-02-22 11:38 PM


What a lovely walk! This is still weeks in the future for us, but it's nice to think it will be coming... someday! Thanks.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

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since 2000-11-16
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5 posted 2001-02-22 11:43 PM


Fun, exciting story. I don't have a real handle on what is considered narrative poetry, but this to me seems more like prose. Have you thought of putting it in prose format? But don't go by me, talk to someone who knows if narrative poetry needs to take a certain form and if it is to have rhythm, etc.

You've captured the experience and anticipation well.

BSC
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6 posted 2001-02-23 09:06 AM


Oh to be able to go outside in sandals Songbird!!!! Right now I'm still up to my knees in snow....but this beautiful poem has given me hope that it WILL melt and the birds will return and...spring IS just around the corner...right???? Bonnie
BloomingRose
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Florida
7 posted 2001-02-23 09:11 AM


This is wonderful! I am sooooooo ready for spring, so this is a most delightful read.
Deb

Songbird
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Missouri
8 posted 2001-02-23 12:46 PM


Well I am glad I gave you guys up North some hope!! I am not sure about the difference between a prose narrative and free style poetry. I just kind of have a rythum in my head as I write, and if it rhymes ok if not I leave it as is. Nature is my favorite theme, especially the birds, I am a birdlover from way back. I even have birds in my house, two lovebirds and a parakeet! Birds are usually cheerful and I love their songs. Keep warm my friends.. spring is coming!!
Temptress
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9 posted 2001-04-02 08:27 AM


Ahh yes...beautiful pictures you pen.   Geesh...In your words, I've found treasure. I shall keep reading.  

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

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Member Rara Avis
since 2001-03-10
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Washington State
10 posted 2001-04-02 11:05 AM


Dear Songbird,  How did I miss this?  It is lovely.  I have no woodpeckers, except once in a while a little downy woodpecker, not colorful.  But I love him.  joyce
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Idaho, USA
11 posted 2001-04-02 11:57 PM


Lovely poem!  We have several kinds of woodpeckers here in North Idaho.  The largest is the pileated woodpecker, that is about 14 inches tall and beautifully marked. When they start drilling holes, you know it!
We had snow here today, and no woodpeckers in sight!

Betty Lou Hebert

Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
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New Zealand
12 posted 2001-04-03 03:54 AM


I've never seen a woodpecker, but this poem surely is beautiful.. ^_^ One suggestion, you seem to be rather fond of the word "just".. I think perhaps the poem would feel a little better, without quite so many just's. A thought only, of course..  
I certainly enjoyed this.. such a wonderful scene you set, and I wish I could see it too..

Love,
Lynne

Songbird
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Missouri
13 posted 2001-04-03 05:47 PM


Yu Lan I believe your critique was "justly" deserved! When I rewrite it I will take the first one out..
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