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Wobbly Head Bob
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since 2000-05-15
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Virginia, USA

0 posted 2001-02-10 08:09 PM


Behind them I see your world
Colors painted randomly
Across the dim black sky
Shape domensions into galaxies
Before time was a substance
And definition yet defined
The suburbs of California
Dust, six trillion years behind
You see
What I'm getting at tomorrow
Won't come till yesterday
The past lies dead behind me
I'll walk on anyway
A thought as empty as my glass
But spat across your screen
You know all matter has its mass
But niether's ever as it seems
Still closed and open onto light
Darkness falls come on delight

© Copyright 2001 Wobbly Head Bob - All Rights Reserved
kcsgrandma
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since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522
Presque Isle, ME
1 posted 2001-02-10 11:04 PM


Nice, Bob.  To tell the truth, I'm not sure I understand this, but it falls nicely on the ears.  I like it when you write in this flowing style.

To love another person is to see the face of God.
- Les Miserables

Marilyn

Wobbly Head Bob
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2 posted 2001-02-10 11:11 PM


Understanding is unimportant, that you've found the rhythm means you've done what I'd hoped you would!  Thanks for the kind words.

PS when you close your eyes you can see and do most anything you want.

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA
3 posted 2001-02-11 02:03 AM


the rhythm is divine, this I could definetly dance to! Great job, Bob...  

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
Posts 352
Alberta, Canada
4 posted 2001-02-13 03:23 PM


This is cool, Bob - you give a glimpse of immense horizons of thought...then condense them back to realistic size...
Enjoyed it!
Lary

Celeste
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5 posted 2001-02-14 08:11 AM


"what I'm getting at tomorrow
won't come till yesterday
The past lies dead behind me
I'll walk on anyway"

I LOVED that part!

A nice one for a foggy morning here in Indy.

To capture and live a moment is truly living


2dalimit
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228
Mississippi coast
6 posted 2001-02-14 09:59 AM


I agree with d k .
.....What I'm getting at tomorrow
Won't come till yesterday
The past lies dead behind me
I'll walk on anyway....
Deep. Moving. Thoughtful.
Melton

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7 posted 2001-02-18 01:29 AM


Nicely written here!
i liked thisone tons!!!!
Yet another masterpiece!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

pegasus111
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since 2000-07-27
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ocala, fl, usa
8 posted 2001-02-21 04:14 AM


the rhythm is great..reminds me of a maze..a struggle to gain enlightenment..

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost



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9 posted 2001-02-22 09:00 PM


'What I'm getting at tomorrow
Won't come till yesterday
The past lies dead behind me
I'll walk on anyway'

Loved this and the rhythm too


~Maria~


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